Oh, moon don’t hide tonight
Oh, moon please shine bright
For today is the night I meet him at last
The wait and the turmoil, a thing of past.
Oh, moon light up the vast sky
Oh, moon be the sparkle of my eye
I want to bask in the glory of his arms
Unafraid lying without any harm
Oh, moon don’t be afraid of thy scars
Oh, moon forego the shyness and the bars
Let him accept me for who I am
The devilish beast and the innocent lamb.
Oh, moon forever be our guiding light
Oh, moon be our solace in the darkest nights
I shall fight the whole universe for him
I shall give my all for him
Oh, moon don’t hide tonight
Deceive the clouds and shine bright
For tonight is the night he shall be mine
For tonight we shall meet on cloud nine.
Oh, moon please shine bright
For today is the night I meet him at last
The wait and the turmoil, a thing of past.
Oh, moon light up the vast sky
Oh, moon be the sparkle of my eye
I want to bask in the glory of his arms
Unafraid lying without any harm
Oh, moon don’t be afraid of thy scars
Oh, moon forego the shyness and the bars
Let him accept me for who I am
The devilish beast and the innocent lamb.
Oh, moon forever be our guiding light
Oh, moon be our solace in the darkest nights
I shall fight the whole universe for him
I shall give my all for him
Oh, moon don’t hide tonight
Deceive the clouds and shine bright
For tonight is the night he shall be mine
For tonight we shall meet on cloud nine.
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14 THEY Read And Said:
Tweety!! WOW poem re..
you could have written this a month back and submitted for Moonlit Lounge contest na :D u'd have won it then perhaps! :)
I loved it.. I read it and got lost in its flow.. I felt it was beautiful!
i njyd it !!! :)
This was beautiful. I love the repetition of the moon .. it's like a song.
You need to work on the last line in the third stanza, and think about removing "forever" in the forth stanza, third line, and changing the last line in the forth stanza to; "For tonight we shall meet on cloud nine", it would read better.
Forever is a word that highly overused in love poetry.
You are really growing in your writing, and I think you know it! I am not good at writing love poems, but I so love reading them.
@leo
thanks a lot dear...if leo gets lost in the words then i think i did a good job :P
@ prats
thanks dear....
@amias
i love u for the fact u correct me and this improves me...i love it when ppl say they loved my poem..but i dont mind being corrected to...
i made the changes amias...as for the last line third stanza...i cant find anything rhyming....so will try doing it but rest changes have been made...thanks again for it..
n yes i agree from the time i started writing poetry...to now i have improved alot...n i have grown and i am happy about it...thanks a lot..
loved it really..it was good :)
good poetry....
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@riya
thanks dear...
@scribblers inc...
thanks fr d appreciation :)
Such a sweet one. Liked each and every stanza...beautiful like the silver full moon.
@swapnap
thanku so much fr d appreciation...thanks fr stopping by..
so damn romantic..wish i wsnnt alone yl readn dis...
@pooji
awww darling... >:D< koi ni...next time dont read it alone.. :)
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